Lace Slab

By admin  

Please critique my poem before I submit it to a critical poetry workshop (:?

It's my first revision of an old free verse poem, to be posted in one of the 'general' forums, I'm hoping to improve it enough to post in intermediate-level, which will take work. Lots of work :/
Please let me know what you think, or if I could improve on anything!

Rainbows In Oil (v2)

It was pigment-splashed and black,
carelessly spilled, laced with mystery
and pooling on the asphalt strip.

Spectrum arcs are born
in the sky. But here, now,
swollen clouds have spritzed down,
in each droplet, a rainbow
to decorate this wanting sulphur slab.

So what of those kaleidoscopic tricksters,
taunting us from azure unknowns?
Hunters of mirage, we always return
with snares empty, and collages
complete with foggy photographs.

What of the imperfect prisms that do, indeed
refract cloudily
and perhaps less vibrantly,
still shimmering in the slick, black muck?

spritzed down seems a strange expression to use for rain.
'wanting' - would 'waiting' be better?
What is a 'sulphur slab'? - the pavement?
....let's stop here. My thoughts are that you have far too many metaphors, and although it is good that you have avoided cliches you seem to be straining too hard to call something other than what it is, your choices sound like 'scientific journalese'

My advise? Simplify your poetry. Describe what you see (using your normal vocabulary)

For me your best bit is 'Hunters of mirage.......photographs' this is simple, unique to you, and says something interesting about us - that we are always searching for the unobtainable, and find ourselves often with just 'foggy photographs'

Check out these deals on Lace Slab-related items and save!

TCR LAGUNA LACE AGATE JASPER LAPIDARY CABBING SLAB FANTASTIC COLORS 212 GRAMS 3
TCR LAGUNA LACE AGATE JASPER LAPIDARY CABBING SLAB FANTASTIC COLORS 212 GRAMS 3
$45.00
TCR CRAZY LACE AGATE JASPER LAPIDARY CABBING SLAB MAGNIFICENT COLORS 158 GRAMS
TCR CRAZY LACE AGATE JASPER LAPIDARY CABBING SLAB MAGNIFICENT COLORS 158 GRAMS
$40.00
AMETHYST LACE SLAB
AMETHYST LACE SLAB
$0.99
Laguna Lace Agate rough slab rock stone 154 gr
Laguna Lace Agate rough slab rock stone 154 gr
$9.99
Laguna Lace Agate rough slab rock stone NEW CUT 164 gr
Laguna Lace Agate rough slab rock stone NEW CUT 164 gr
$4.99
Cray Lace Agate rough slab
Cray Lace Agate rough slab
$8.99
Laguna Lace Agate rough slab rock stone HUGE NEW CUT  256 gr
Laguna Lace Agate rough slab rock stone HUGE NEW CUT 256 gr
$14.99
RED MEXICAN CRAZY LACE AGATE SLAB craz3
RED MEXICAN CRAZY LACE AGATE SLAB craz3
$17.55
Bubbles lace and Uruguayan banding in shades of white
Bubbles lace and Uruguayan banding in shades of white
$6.00
Silver Lace Onyx Barstow California Lapidary Rock Rough Slab SL101610
Silver Lace Onyx Barstow California Lapidary Rock Rough Slab SL101610
$4.50
221 Plume Lace SlabBlack and White62 gr
221 Plume Lace SlabBlack and White62 gr
$3.99
197 Mexican Crazy Lace Slab58 gr
197 Mexican Crazy Lace Slab58 gr
$3.29
Red crazy lace agate slab
Red crazy lace agate slab
$7.99
2 CRAZY LACE AGATE SLABS 69 Grams Rough
2 CRAZY LACE AGATE SLABS 69 Grams Rough
$4.50
Crazy Lace Agate Lot of 3 Slabs Nice Colors Sagenite and Lace Patterns
Crazy Lace Agate Lot of 3 Slabs Nice Colors Sagenite and Lace Patterns
$3.90
Lovely ROYAL AZTEC LACE AGATE End Slice  The RockPile
Lovely ROYAL AZTEC LACE AGATE End Slice The RockPile
$7.49
HUGE CHUNK OF CRAZY LACE AGATE 4 1 4 LBS SLABS CABS
HUGE CHUNK OF CRAZY LACE AGATE 4 1 4 LBS SLABS CABS
$16.00
MEXICAN CRAZY LACE AGATE SLAB 53 GRAMS
MEXICAN CRAZY LACE AGATE SLAB 53 GRAMS
$2.00
CRAZY LACE AGATE JASPER 115 OZ EXTRA THICK OLD STOCK
CRAZY LACE AGATE JASPER 115 OZ EXTRA THICK OLD STOCK
$10.00
CRAZY LACE AGATE JASPER SLAB OLD STOCK
CRAZY LACE AGATE JASPER SLAB OLD STOCK
$7.00
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate 1350 g Brilliant Stone Slab Display Specimen
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate 1350 g Brilliant Stone Slab Display Specimen
$6.99
Mw Purple AZTEC LACE Agate Rouh Slab Mexico Great Cabber
Mw Purple AZTEC LACE Agate Rouh Slab Mexico Great Cabber
$0.99
Mexican Crazy Lace Rough Slab Low Grade          H9
Mexican Crazy Lace Rough Slab Low Grade H9
$3.99
TCR CRAZY LACE AGATE JASPER LAPIDARY CABBING SLAB STUPENDOUS COLORS 103 GRAMS
TCR CRAZY LACE AGATE JASPER LAPIDARY CABBING SLAB STUPENDOUS COLORS 103 GRAMS
$9.00
rle LACE ONYX SLAB MEXICO OLD TIME FAVORITE
rle LACE ONYX SLAB MEXICO OLD TIME FAVORITE
$9.00
Laguna Lace Agate Chihuahua Mexico Rough Slab Jewelry Grade Rock LG101720
Laguna Lace Agate Chihuahua Mexico Rough Slab Jewelry Grade Rock LG101720
$4.50
Rock slab CRYSTAL LACE agate beautiful pattern
Rock slab CRYSTAL LACE agate beautiful pattern
$0.99
22 oz Crazy Lace Agate lapidary rough slab
22 oz Crazy Lace Agate lapidary rough slab
$1.99
Rock slab BLUE LACE agate lacey ltblue white pattern
Rock slab BLUE LACE agate lacey ltblue white pattern
$0.99
8865 Laced Wave slab104gr
8865 Laced Wave slab104gr
$3.99
Crazy Lace Agate Polished Slab
Crazy Lace Agate Polished Slab
$3.00
Red Crazy Lace agate Lapidary Cabochon rough 825 lbs Great colors patterns
Red Crazy Lace agate Lapidary Cabochon rough 825 lbs Great colors patterns
$4,200.00
Red Crazy Lace agate Lapidary Cabochon rough 238 lbs Great colors patterns
Red Crazy Lace agate Lapidary Cabochon rough 238 lbs Great colors patterns
$1,250.00
Mirror polished red lace agate slab
Mirror polished red lace agate slab
$15.99
S 1274 23 oz Thick Slab Sagenitic Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
S 1274 23 oz Thick Slab Sagenitic Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
$6.50
S 1273 34 oz Thick Slab Sagenitic Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
S 1273 34 oz Thick Slab Sagenitic Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
$7.50
Royal Purple Lace Agate
Royal Purple Lace Agate
$8.00
TCR LAGUNA LACE AGATE JASPER LAPIDARY CABBING SLAB EXQUISITE COLORS 187 GRAMS
TCR LAGUNA LACE AGATE JASPER LAPIDARY CABBING SLAB EXQUISITE COLORS 187 GRAMS
$9.00
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate Rough Small Cabbing Slab Mexico     I8
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate Rough Small Cabbing Slab Mexico I8
$1.50
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate Rough Small Cabbing Slab Mexico     I9
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate Rough Small Cabbing Slab Mexico I9
$1.50
S 0514 62 oz Thick Slab Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
S 0514 62 oz Thick Slab Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
$7.95
S 0513 76 oz Thick Slab Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
S 0513 76 oz Thick Slab Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
$8.95
S 0512 64 oz Thick Slab Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
S 0512 64 oz Thick Slab Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
$7.95
S 0511 44 oz Thick Slab Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
S 0511 44 oz Thick Slab Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
$5.95
S 0510 68 oz 3pc End Cut  Slabs Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
S 0510 68 oz 3pc End Cut Slabs Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
$7.95
S 2289 25oz Slab Sagenitic Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
S 2289 25oz Slab Sagenitic Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
$1.99
S 2290 23oz Slab Sagenitic Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
S 2290 23oz Slab Sagenitic Crazy Lace Agate Mexico
$1.99
S 0499 58 oz 2pc Thick Slabs Pseudomorph Crazy Lace Old Stock Agate
S 0499 58 oz 2pc Thick Slabs Pseudomorph Crazy Lace Old Stock Agate
$11.95
S 0497 52 oz 2pc Thick Slabs Pseudomorph Crazy Lace Old Stock Agate
S 0497 52 oz 2pc Thick Slabs Pseudomorph Crazy Lace Old Stock Agate
$11.95
S 0496 40 oz 2pc Slabs Pseudomorph Crazy Lace Old Stock Agate
S 0496 40 oz 2pc Slabs Pseudomorph Crazy Lace Old Stock Agate
$9.95
S 0495 30 oz 2pc Slabs Pseudomorph Crazy Lace Old Stock Agate
S 0495 30 oz 2pc Slabs Pseudomorph Crazy Lace Old Stock Agate
$9.95
Rock slab SILVER LACE ONYX beautiful intricate pattern
Rock slab SILVER LACE ONYX beautiful intricate pattern
$0.99
Rock slab ZEBRA LACE agate high contrast striking pattern
Rock slab ZEBRA LACE agate high contrast striking pattern
$0.99
WRG Lace Agate Slab 30 gm Lapidary Rough Mineral Gemstone Specimen
WRG Lace Agate Slab 30 gm Lapidary Rough Mineral Gemstone Specimen
$3.99
Rock slab MEXICAN LACE COYAMO agate gorgeous colors lively patten
Rock slab MEXICAN LACE COYAMO agate gorgeous colors lively patten
$0.99
MEXICAN RED CRAZY LACE AGATE ROUGH NICE CABBER SLAB DISPLAY SPECIMEN LAPIDIARY
MEXICAN RED CRAZY LACE AGATE ROUGH NICE CABBER SLAB DISPLAY SPECIMEN LAPIDIARY
$1.99
CRAZY LACE AGATE SLAB EXTRA THICK 9 0Z
CRAZY LACE AGATE SLAB EXTRA THICK 9 0Z
$1.00
MEXICAN CRAZY LACE AGATE SLAB 135 GRAMS
MEXICAN CRAZY LACE AGATE SLAB 135 GRAMS
$1.00
Honey lace onyx 74 oz lapidary cabochon slab
Honey lace onyx 74 oz lapidary cabochon slab
$14.99
Laguana lace agate slab nice 25 grams
Laguana lace agate slab nice 25 grams
$6.00
Laguana lace agate slab nice 151 grams
Laguana lace agate slab nice 151 grams
$6.00
Laguana lace agate slab nice 337 grams
Laguana lace agate slab nice 337 grams
$2.99
Blue Lace Agate Slab Slice Idaho Utah 37 grams cabs cabbing
Blue Lace Agate Slab Slice Idaho Utah 37 grams cabs cabbing
$14.95
Mexican Crazy Lace Rough Slab Uneven Slab        H8
Mexican Crazy Lace Rough Slab Uneven Slab H8
$5.99
rle WOOD LACE AGATE ROUGH BRAZIL EXCELLENT RARE
rle WOOD LACE AGATE ROUGH BRAZIL EXCELLENT RARE
$70.00
CRAZY LACE AGATE SLAB Premium Red Color 1 1 4 X 2 1 2 x 25 mm
CRAZY LACE AGATE SLAB Premium Red Color 1 1 4 X 2 1 2 x 25 mm
$8.00
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate Slab 9 oz
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate Slab 9 oz
$8.50
695 Old Stock Crazy Lace Slab59 gr
695 Old Stock Crazy Lace Slab59 gr
$3.99
Amethyst Lace slab gem lapidary rough
Amethyst Lace slab gem lapidary rough
$8.75
Midnite Lace Obsidian Slab Glass Butte Oregon Great Wispy Lace Pattern Solid
Midnite Lace Obsidian Slab Glass Butte Oregon Great Wispy Lace Pattern Solid
$0.99
Laguna Crazy Lace Agate Slab from Mexico
Laguna Crazy Lace Agate Slab from Mexico
$4.99
AMETHYST LACE SLAB VERY NICE
AMETHYST LACE SLAB VERY NICE
$18.95
Red Crazy Lace Agate Slab 1 B from Mexico
Red Crazy Lace Agate Slab 1 B from Mexico
$4.99
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate Slabs 11oz
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate Slabs 11oz
$10.00
Crazy Lace Agate Slab for cabbing rough OLD STOCK
Crazy Lace Agate Slab for cabbing rough OLD STOCK
$12.95
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate Small Rough Cabbing Slab       J2
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate Small Rough Cabbing Slab J2
$1.50
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate Rough Slab          J10
Mexican Crazy Lace Agate Rough Slab J10
$7.99
High Grade old stock Mexican Crazy lace JasperOld stock materiallapidary rough
High Grade old stock Mexican Crazy lace JasperOld stock materiallapidary rough
$0.99
High Grade old stock Mexican Crazy lace JasperOld stock materiallapidary
High Grade old stock Mexican Crazy lace JasperOld stock materiallapidary
$1.99
ROYAL AZTEC LACE AGATE SLAB  MEXICO     92 GRAMS
ROYAL AZTEC LACE AGATE SLAB MEXICO 92 GRAMS
$0.75
DIG N UTAH MEXICAN LACE AGATE SLAB D 350
DIG N UTAH MEXICAN LACE AGATE SLAB D 350
$0.99
RJCJ Crazy Lace Agate Slab Beautiful 935 grams
RJCJ Crazy Lace Agate Slab Beautiful 935 grams
$4.99
6 stone slabs Mexican agate crazy lace Sagenite honey and serpentine
6 stone slabs Mexican agate crazy lace Sagenite honey and serpentine
$15.95
6 stone slabs Mexican agate crazy lace Sagenite honey and serpentine
6 stone slabs Mexican agate crazy lace Sagenite honey and serpentine
$15.95
2 SLABS 69 OUNCES TOTAL OF NICE GOLDEN LACE AGATE NEW FIND
2 SLABS 69 OUNCES TOTAL OF NICE GOLDEN LACE AGATE NEW FIND
$4.99
Silver Lace Onyx Barstow California Lapidary Rock Rough Slab SLO93026
Silver Lace Onyx Barstow California Lapidary Rock Rough Slab SLO93026
$4.50
Rock slab MEXICAN LACE ROGUE LACE agate intricate dynamic pattern
Rock slab MEXICAN LACE ROGUE LACE agate intricate dynamic pattern
$0.99
077 Mexican Lace Agate Slab131 gr
077 Mexican Lace Agate Slab131 gr
$6.99
CRAZY LACE AGATE slab from Mexico super colors
CRAZY LACE AGATE slab from Mexico super colors
$2.99
LARGE 26 OUNCE 35X275X1 4 SUPURB SLAB OF LAGUNA LACE AGATE
LARGE 26 OUNCE 35X275X1 4 SUPURB SLAB OF LAGUNA LACE AGATE
$7.99
HUGE 5X5X1 4 THICK NICE SLAB OF GOLDEN LACE AGATE NEW FIND
HUGE 5X5X1 4 THICK NICE SLAB OF GOLDEN LACE AGATE NEW FIND
$4.99
HUGE 3 OUNCE 45X25X1 4 SUPURB SLAB OF LAGUNA LACE AGATE
HUGE 3 OUNCE 45X25X1 4 SUPURB SLAB OF LAGUNA LACE AGATE
$7.99
Rock slab LAGUNA LACE agate intricate detailed patternl
Rock slab LAGUNA LACE agate intricate detailed patternl
$0.99
5 SLABS 98 OUNCES OF LAGUNA LACE AGATE
5 SLABS 98 OUNCES OF LAGUNA LACE AGATE
$7.99
457 Obsidian Knapping pieces280 gr Lacedblack mahog
457 Obsidian Knapping pieces280 gr Lacedblack mahog
$3.79
5 SLABS 10 OUNCES OF LAGUNA LACE AGATE
5 SLABS 10 OUNCES OF LAGUNA LACE AGATE
$7.99
Rock slab MEXICAN CRAZY LACE agate splendid colors intricate patternl
Rock slab MEXICAN CRAZY LACE agate splendid colors intricate patternl
$0.99
2 SLABS 68 OUNCES TOTAL OF NICE GOLDEN LACE AGATE NEW FIND
2 SLABS 68 OUNCES TOTAL OF NICE GOLDEN LACE AGATE NEW FIND
$4.99
Mexican Crazy Lace Rough Slab Some Parallax Fantastic     b20
Mexican Crazy Lace Rough Slab Some Parallax Fantastic b20
$9.99



Clay Pottery Slab Building : Lace Texture Tips for Clay Slabs



Recently found via this site:

Rose Lace Pink Paisley Agate Slab, Mexican Crazy Lace agate slab, Strawberry Lace Onyx Slab, Mexican Crazy Lace Agate slab, Mexican Crazy Lace Agate slab, Rose Lace Pink Paisley Agate slab, Mexican Crazy Lace Agate 2 slabs, Mexican Crazy Lace slab, Mexican Crazy Lace slab, MEXICAN CRAZY LACE AGATE ROUGH SLAB WHITE YELLOW BLUE GREY PSEUDOMORPHS, Mexican Crazy Lace Rough Slab with Parallax Uneven Slab A21, TCR LAGUNA LACE AGATE JASPER LAPIDARY CABBING SLAB STUPENDOUS COLORS 223 GRAMS, TCR CRAZY LACE AGATE JASPER LAPIDARY CABBING SLAB BEAUTIFUL COLORS 121 GRAMS, NEW FIND AMETHYST RED BANDED LACE290 GramRock SlabGemstoneCabbinglapidary, NEW RED MEXICO CRAZY LACEAGATE340 gram slabgemSPECIMENcablapidary, Mohogany Lace Obsidian Slab Glass Buttes Oregon, Laguna Lace Agate rough slab rock stone NEW CUT 160 gr, Beautiful 353 g lace agate slabbed mineral specimen slabs TW1303151, Large Slab of Lace Type Agate, Rock slab BLUE LACE agate Blue white patern, Crazy Lace Agate Slab for cabbing Lapidary, R203 Laced Obsidian slab Nice, ARIZONA AMETHYST LACE AGATE SLAB GORGEOUS GEM QUALITY, Beautiful 478 g Laguna Lace Agate slabbed mineral specimen, CRAZY LACE AGATE slab from Mexico super colors,




Post a Comment

Your email is never shared. Required fields are marked *

*
*